Writerrific #1: Assignment 4
The assignment was to choose a color to write about. Use the thesaurus function on your software or a printed thesaurus at least ten times during this exercise. Work to focus your writing and write tight. Make the assignment no more than 250 words. The example given by the instructor was to assume the personality of the color...be the color.
Apple White (184 words)
When I first appeared on the scene people were shocked. I wasn’t the tan or beige or buff they expected me to be. I wasn’t the black or steel or charcoal they hoped I’d be. I was something new, something innovative, something iconic.
Today, I shine like glistening snow in a world of soot and sand. For people used to oatmeal and cream I am as fresh as pasteurized milk. Basic black and traditional tan pale before my opalescent alabaster finish. I am refined and polished and posh. I am hip and cool, and cutting edge. One thing I am not is a flash in the pan. My affable achromatic appearance is aped again and again by apathetic artists and architects. Every “me too” iteration of my gleaming pearlescence highlights my own originality.
White says you have arrived. White says you are stylish and successful. White says you are cut from a different cloth, you’re your own man, you’re dancing to a different drummer. Gone are the days of rainbow colored fruit and bland boxes. I am white—-Apple White!
Apple White (184 words)
When I first appeared on the scene people were shocked. I wasn’t the tan or beige or buff they expected me to be. I wasn’t the black or steel or charcoal they hoped I’d be. I was something new, something innovative, something iconic.
Today, I shine like glistening snow in a world of soot and sand. For people used to oatmeal and cream I am as fresh as pasteurized milk. Basic black and traditional tan pale before my opalescent alabaster finish. I am refined and polished and posh. I am hip and cool, and cutting edge. One thing I am not is a flash in the pan. My affable achromatic appearance is aped again and again by apathetic artists and architects. Every “me too” iteration of my gleaming pearlescence highlights my own originality.
White says you have arrived. White says you are stylish and successful. White says you are cut from a different cloth, you’re your own man, you’re dancing to a different drummer. Gone are the days of rainbow colored fruit and bland boxes. I am white—-Apple White!
posted by WDavid | 7/02/2006 11:21:00 AM
4 Comments:
Very nice. You could make million$ selling this as a commercial :o)
Here are the comments from my classmates and instructor:
Donna writes: I like your type of white WDavid!! Your words had me reading along at a great pace and getting excitied about this new phenomenom called apple white!
I think you used your own feeling for the assignment and follwed through wonderfully.
Chele writes: A sales pitch. Very cool way to approach this. I love the 'opalescent alabaster' line. I was ready to buy at the end!
Helen writes: Nicely done! Especially the line that has 11 words starting with A! And, I learned something new! I was thinking this is called alliteration, but when I looked it up, I found out that that is for phrases that repeat consonants... using words repetatively that begin with vowels is called assonance. Cool! Great job.
Teresa writes: Great job, David! A very origingal take on this assignment. I admire your talent and I'm learning from you.
Glenda writes: Excellent alliteration in the sentence, "My affable achromatic appearance has been aped..." Great work.
Your instructor writes: I am so glad you did the assignment, even though it is not easy. I don't know if you've yet read Jessica's comments, but she's not alone in thinking that it is stupid and darn tough. I nearly canceled the assignment. Wonderful writing, WDavid. Every line felt fresher than the one before and clever too.
steph writes: i love it !!! A totally different take on the assignment but clever and fun and wow I want some of that apple white!!
mark writes: you really got to the core of this assignment
Marilyn writes: You are very creative and I loved your piece. The words you used were wonderful and your interpretation of using a color like that was so original.
monica writes: I like your writing style, crisp, concise, to the point, just like white.
That's one fine assonance you got boy! :)
Like my classmate, I never knew there was a special words for a string of words beginning with the same vowel. I too thought it was all alliteration.
Post a Comment
<< Home